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어떤 문제에 대해 양쪽의 주장을 제시한 다음 자신의 결론에 이르는 균형 잡힌 에세이를 씁니다.

Should homework be banned in primary schools?

Homework has long been a standard part of school life, yet an increasing number of parents and teachers are questioning its value for younger children. There are strong arguments on both sides of this debate.

On the one hand, banning homework could have several benefits. Young children who spend six hours a day in the classroom need time to play, rest and develop interests outside school. Moreover, homework can create tension at home, particularly when parents are too busy or lack the knowledge to help. Some researchers also suggest that, at this age, homework has little measurable effect on achievement.

On the other hand, regular homework can teach children valuable habits such as organisation and independent study. In addition, short tasks like reading with a parent help families stay informed about what their children are learning. Critics of a ban argue that abolishing homework entirely might make the transition to secondary school, where workloads are heavier, more difficult.

In conclusion, while excessive homework is clearly unhelpful for young learners, a complete ban may go too far. In my view, a limited amount of enjoyable, practical homework offers the best balance.

대조와 균형

가장 알맞은 단어, 표현 또는 문장을 고르세요.

___ the high cost, many families choose to send their children to summer camps.
- a) Although
- b) Despite
- c) However
___ online learning is flexible, some students find it hard to stay motivated.
- a) Despite
- b) In spite
- c) Although
Electric cars produce less pollution in cities. ___, they are still too expensive for many drivers.
- a) On the other hand
- b) Despite
- c) Whereas
Some people prefer to work alone, ___ others are more productive in a team.
- a) despite
- b) whereas
- c) moreover
___, the advantages of a four-day school week outweigh the disadvantages.
- a) On balance
- b) On the one hand
- c) Despite
Which sentence is the most suitable for the main body of a for-and-against essay?
- a) I totally hate this idea!
- b) It is often argued that tourism can damage local traditions.
- c) Everybody knows tourism is terrible.
A major ___ of working from home is the lack of contact with colleagues.
- a) drawback
- b) benefit
- c) advantage

에세이 구상하기

'Should schools replace printed textbooks with tablets?'라는 제목의 에세이에서 가져온 각 문장을 읽으세요. 그 문장이 들어갈 에세이의 부분을 고르세요.

Many schools are deciding whether to replace printed textbooks with tablets, and opinions are divided.
- a) Introduction
- b) Arguments for
- c) Arguments against
- d) Conclusion
Critics claim that looking at screens for hours can cause tiredness and headaches.
- a) Introduction
- b) Arguments for
- c) Arguments against
- d) Conclusion
Supporters argue that tablets can hold hundreds of books, so students carry less weight.
- a) Introduction
- b) Arguments for
- c) Arguments against
- d) Conclusion
A major drawback is that tablets are expensive to buy and repair.
- a) Introduction
- b) Arguments for
- c) Arguments against
- d) Conclusion
Furthermore, digital textbooks can be updated instantly when information changes.
- a) Introduction
- b) Arguments for
- c) Arguments against
- d) Conclusion
On balance, a mix of printed books and digital resources seems the most sensible approach.
- a) Introduction
- b) Arguments for
- c) Arguments against
- d) Conclusion

쓰기 과제

선생님이 'Should teenagers have a part-time job while they are still at school?'라는 제목으로 찬반 에세이를 쓰라고 하셨습니다. 양쪽의 주장을 제시하고 결론에서 자신의 의견을 밝히세요.

180–260단어

내 글 확인

도입부에서 주제를 중립적으로 소개했습니다.
찬성 주장을 한 문단, 반대 주장을 한 문단으로 썼습니다.
각 주장은 설명이나 예시로 뒷받침했습니다.
On the one hand, Moreover, On the other hand 같은 연결어를 사용했습니다.
본문 문단에서 격식 있고 비개인적인 문체를 사용했습니다.
내 의견은 결론에서만 밝혔습니다.

정답

대조와 균형

b) DespiteDespite 뒤에는 명사구(the high cost)가 옵니다. Although는 동사가 있는 완전한 절이 필요합니다.
c) AlthoughAlthough 뒤에는 주어와 동사가 있는 절이 옵니다: online learning is flexible.
a) On the other handOn the other hand는 새 문장을 시작하며 반대쪽 입장을 이끕니다.
b) whereasWhereas는 대조되는 두 사실을 한 문장에서 연결합니다.
a) On balanceOn balance는 양쪽을 고려한 뒤의 최종 판단을 이끕니다.
b) It is often argued that tourism can damage local traditions.It is often argued that ...은 비개인적이고 균형 잡힌 표현입니다. 나머지 문장은 감정적이거나 과장되어 있습니다.
a) drawback접촉 부족은 부정적인 점이므로 drawback(단점)이 맞습니다.

에세이 구상하기

a) Introduction주제를 중립적으로 소개하고 의견이 갈린다고 말하므로 도입부에 들어갑니다.
c) Arguments againstCritics claim은 태블릿 사용에 반대하는 주장을 이끕니다.
b) Arguments forSupporters argue는 태블릿에 찬성하는 주장을 이끕니다.
c) Arguments againstA major drawback은 단점을 이끕니다.
b) Arguments forFurthermore는 디지털 교과서의 또 다른 장점을 덧붙입니다.
d) ConclusionOn balance는 양쪽을 저울질한 뒤 글쓴이의 최종 판단을 이끕니다.

모범 답안

In many countries, it is common for teenagers to combine their studies with a part-time job, for example in a shop or a café. However, opinions differ as to whether this is a good idea.

On the one hand, a part-time job can teach young people important lessons that school cannot. They learn to manage their time, deal with customers and take responsibility for their own money. Moreover, earning a wage can increase their independence and help them understand the value of hard work. Work experience may also make their CVs more attractive to future employers.

On the other hand, there are serious concerns about the effect on education. Students who work long hours in the evenings or at weekends may have less time for homework and revision, and their results could suffer as a consequence. In addition, tiredness can affect their health and leave little time for friends, sport or hobbies.

In conclusion, a part-time job clearly has both benefits and risks. On balance, I believe it can be a positive experience, provided that teenagers work only a few hours a week and their studies remain the priority.