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A discursive essay on automation and work

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Automation and the meaning of work

It is often assumed that the spread of automation will leave people with more leisure and, consequently, greater well-being. Whether this is so depends largely on what we expect work to provide.

Admittedly, the case for automation is strong. Machines already perform repetitive and hazardous tasks more safely and more consistently than people, and few would argue that anyone is worse off for no longer sorting parcels by hand. Were such tasks to disappear altogether, workers could, in principle, devote their time to activities that demand judgement, imagination and care.

Nevertheless, this optimistic view overlooks the fact that employment offers far more than income. For many people it supplies structure, a sense of competence and a network of colleagues, none of which is easily replaced by leisure. Indeed, research into long-term unemployment suggests that losing these benefits can be as damaging as losing the wages themselves. Not only does automation threaten particular jobs, but it may also erode the routines that give daily life its shape, and it is by no means clear that people will fill the gap with activities of equal value.

A more balanced position is therefore called for. Rather than resisting technology, societies might invest in retraining and in shorter working weeks, so that the gains are shared rather than concentrated in a few hands. It is also worth noting that the occupations most resistant to automation, such as teaching and nursing, tend to be those in which human relationships matter most, which hints at where future effort could usefully be directed.

In conclusion, automation is neither a threat nor a cure in itself. Its effect on well-being will depend on whether we are prepared to redefine work, and not merely to reduce it.

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기능논의형 에세이를 위한 표현피할 표현
Introducing the issueIt is often assumed that ... / It is widely believed that ...Everybody thinks that ...
Conceding a pointAdmittedly, ... / It is true that ..., but ... / Granted, ...Okay, they have a point, but ...
Counter-argumentNevertheless, this view overlooks ... / Yet this ignores ...But that is wrong.
Emphasis by inversionNot only does X ..., but it also ... / Were X to happen, ...X is really, really bad.
Hedgingmay well / tends to / it seems likely that / to some extentalways / never / obviously
ConcludingIn conclusion, ... / All things considered, ... / On balance, ...So yeah, in the end ...

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  1. Which sentence is most suitably hedged for an academic essay?

  2. _____ such tasks to disappear, workers could focus on more creative activities.

  3. _____ the benefits are considerable, they are unevenly shared.

  4. Which sentence best opens a paragraph that challenges the previous one?

  5. Not only _____ threaten particular jobs, but it also changes daily routines.

  6. Which phrase best introduces a final paragraph that weighs the arguments?

  7. Which sentence avoids an unsupported generalisation?

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  1. It is widely (assume) that automation will give people more free time.

  2. from income, work gives many people a sense of competence.

  3. This view overlooks fact that work gives life structure.

  4. Societies might invest in retraining, that the gains are shared more widely.

  5. Automation is neither a threat a cure in itself.

  6. Jobs that rely on empathy are, on the , harder to automate.

  7. Whether wages will rise remains be seen.

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It is frequently suggested that the growth of remote work will diminish the role of city centres. Whether this proves true depends on what we think centres are for.

Admittedly, the evidence is suggestive. Offices that emptied when remote work became widespread have not always refilled, and shops that relied on commuters have struggled. Rents in some business districts have already fallen, which encourages owners to look for alternative uses. Were this pattern to continue, some districts might well become redundant.

However, this argument assumes that centres exist chiefly to house workplaces. In reality they also provide theatres, markets, libraries and meeting places, none of which is easily replicated at a kitchen table. Moreover, many employees report that working alone for long periods leaves them isolated, which suggests that the appeal of shared urban space may actually increase.

It is also worth remembering that cities have adapted before. When factories moved out, former industrial districts were converted into homes and studios, and the centres that survived were those that offered something people could not find elsewhere.

On balance, remote work is likely to change the character of city centres rather than end their importance. The challenge for planners will be to encourage a richer mix of uses, so that centres attract people for reasons other than their jobs. If that succeeds, the city centre of the future may be busier at weekends than on weekdays, and none the worse for it.

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